Writing

bobbieinok

(12,858 posts) Thu Jul 16, 2020, 12:23 PM Jul 2020

Need a place to put this down, maybe get reaction

Meditating, then writing

Rolling through the Summer,
Rolling through the Fall,
Anyone anywhere still standing tall?

Singing songs of Sorrow,
Singing songs of Peace.

Rolling through the Summer,
Rolling through the Fall,
We're marching on together One and All.

Morning, Thursday, July 16, 2020

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Need a place to put this down, maybe get reaction (Original Post) bobbieinok Jul 2020 OP

Very nicely done! SheltieLover Jul 2020 #1

I like it 🙂 MLAA Jul 2020 #2

Thank you for those verses, bobbieinok. +++ pdxflyboy Jul 2020 #3

Thank you for responses bobbieinok Jul 2020 #4

Nice rhythm, balance and imagery, and... Amy-Strange Jul 2020 #5

SheltieLover

(81,759 posts)

1. Very nicely done!

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Thu Jul 16, 2020, 12:27 PM

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MLAA

(19,803 posts)

2. I like it 🙂

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Thu Jul 16, 2020, 12:33 PM

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pdxflyboy

(947 posts)

3. Thank you for those verses, bobbieinok. +++

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Thu Jul 16, 2020, 12:35 PM

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bobbieinok

(12,858 posts)

4. Thank you for responses

Reply to bobbieinok (Original post)

Thu Jul 16, 2020, 12:46 PM

Jul 2020

The first 2 lines just sorta 'appeared'. Had to spend bit of time, effort on rest

I 'm not a poetry writer by any means. But this morning these words just seemed 'right.'

Amy-Strange

(854 posts)

5. Nice rhythm, balance and imagery, and...

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Thu Jul 16, 2020, 06:56 PM

Jul 2020

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maybe I'm just an old guy, but the strolling "rolling" part reminds me of an old Ike & Tina Turner song (covered by CCR), Proud Mary:

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